Don't plant TOO many clues

Song of Solomon: timeless love poetry in contemporary calligraphy. 

A second draft of IV: 5 - 9 

This second draft of "One Gem," building on the landscape idea, got too complicated, since, in making it look more like the silhouette of a mountain range, I also made it harder to read.  The voice seemed to go up and down, and it wasn't always clear which line to read next.  (Whenever I see readers tilting their heads to read, I know I need to simplify my layout.)  

Other design aspects work better in this draft.  I tried out a blue ink;* it has to be dark enough to still have tone left when I dilute it for the small, faraway letters.  And I've started playing with the curled descender of the small g in "gem."  I think I can fill it with--what else!?--a gem.     

* FW Acrylic Indigo Blue.